{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"6252481","dateCreated":"1224300189","smartDate":"Oct 17, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"KathyWu","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/KathyWu","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6252481"},"dateDigested":1532127455,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Feedback-Kathy","description":"Structure:
\nUsed 3 or more paragraphs, separated ideas into different areas
\n
\nVocabulary:
\nUsed one or two linking words \u2013 some different vocabulary but many mistakes
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\nGrammar:
\nUsed a variety of tenses to show change in meaning \u2013 many mistakes
\nExample : is talk, to be happen
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\nOverall:
\nCompleted the task adequately \u2013many mistakes make meaning unclear
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\nOverall comment:
\nUnclear and seems you are not sure about what's going on","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"6250531","dateCreated":"1224292088","smartDate":"Oct 17, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"hillton6a5","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/hillton6a5","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6250531"},"dateDigested":1532127455,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Feedback for(Bryan and Sam - Da Funk)","description":"Structure:
\nNot so bad, but I think there is a mass of the paragraphs, I don't know why they only have three quite mass paragraphs in this article.
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\nGrammar:
\nDon't you have other tenses? I can't really know about the time for the story because of the tense. But other things about grammar is good.
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\nVocabulary:
\nUse "but" wrongly, like "the book that sales there is quite old but cheap", I think there's no linking in "old" and "cheap" and they use some useless word too. Except for these, I think the vocabulary in this article is okay but I think if they can use more different word, it can be more interesting.
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\nOverall:
\nMany useless words is the most important bad point, and some of the grammar in the article is wrong, but it's not too long and it has many details in it, so it's quite good.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"6232583","dateCreated":"1224245832","smartDate":"Oct 17, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"alvin0608","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/alvin0608","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6232583"},"dateDigested":1532127456,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Feedback for(Bryan and Sam - Da Funk)","description":"Structure:
\nUsed 3 or more paragraphs, separated ideas clearly into different areas
\nExample: He uses 3 paragraphs.
\n
\n
\nVocabulary:
\nUsed one or two linking words \u2013 some different vocabulary but many mistakes
\nExample:
\nhe sometimes links the sentences wrongly.e.g. ( Inside the store, when he was choosing things, he met a lady that is his neighbour, they talked happily together, and they bought things.)
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\nGrammar:
\nUsed a variety of tenses to show change in meaning \u2013 many mistakes
\nExample: past and present tenses
\n
\nOverall:
\nCompleted the task adequately \u2013many mistakes make meaning unclear
\nOverall comment:
\nI think this passage made many mistake but it can express its idea.I think this passage is ok only.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"6100699","dateCreated":"1223865148","smartDate":"Oct 12, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"Winnie6023","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Winnie6023","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1223865987\/Winnie6023-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6100699"},"dateDigested":1532127456,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"\u2606Feedback\u2606","description":"Used 3 or more paragraphs, separated ideas clearly into different areas
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\nVocabulary:
\nUsed one or two linking words \u2013 some different vocabulary but many mistakes
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\nGrammar:
\nUsed a variety of tenses to show change in meaning \u2013 few mistakes
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\nOverall:
\nCompleted the task \u2013 few mistakes and clear meaning
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\nOverall comment:
\nThe review is good because they write what the story about,the feeling of the music and what the hope to the music.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"6082575","dateCreated":"1223736033","smartDate":"Oct 11, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"matthew_ccy67","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/matthew_ccy67","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6082575"},"dateDigested":1532127456,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Feedback for(Bryan and Sam - Da Funk)","description":"Structure:
\nUsed 3 or more paragraphs, separated ideas clearly into different areas
\nExample:
\nThe first paragraph is about the summary. The second parpagraph is about their own opinion. The last parpgraph is comparing between the music and the video.
\n
\nGrammar:
\nUsed one tense \u2013 meaning is unclear and difficult to understand Example:
\nThere is just only present tense can be found in whole report
\n
\nVocabulary:
\nUsed one or two linking words \u2013 some different vocabulary but many mistakes
\nExample:
\n1.the book that sales there is quite old but cheap
\n2.the small part of that story should be quite sad because the main character\u2019s leg was not worked quite well
\n
\nOverall:
\nCompleted the task adequately \u2013many mistakes make meaning unclear
\nOverall comment:
\nI personally feel that this report is a bit too long beacause lots of words are useless.Some grammar mistakes can also be found.But overall,it is quite detail.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"6082573","dateCreated":"1223736032","smartDate":"Oct 11, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"matthew_ccy67","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/matthew_ccy67","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6082573"},"dateDigested":1532127456,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Feedback for(Bryan and Sam - Da Funk)","description":"Structure:
\nUsed 3 or more paragraphs, separated ideas clearly into different areas
\nExample:
\nThe first paragraph is about the summary. The second parpagraph is about their own opinion. The last parpgraph is comparing between the music and the video.
\n
\nGrammar:
\nUsed one tense \u2013 meaning is unclear and difficult to understand Example:
\nThere is just only present tense can be found in whole report
\nVocabulary:
\nUsed one or two linking words \u2013 some different vocabulary but many mistakes
\nExample:
\n1.the book that sales there is quite old but cheap
\n2.the small part of that story should be quite sad because the main character\u2019s leg was not worked quite well
\n
\nOverall:
\nCompleted the task adequately \u2013many mistakes make meaning unclear
\nOverall comment:
\nI personally feel that this report is a bit too long beacause lots of words are useless.Some grammar mistakes can also be found.But overall,it is quite detail.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}