{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"6284241","dateCreated":"1224506355","smartDate":"Oct 20, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"jeffreyhonghong","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/jeffreyhonghong","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6284241"},"dateDigested":1532127439,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Connie and Kelly - Romeo","description":"Structure: <br \/>\nUsed 3 or more paragraphs, separated ideas clearly into different areas <br \/>\nExample:<br \/>\nThis song sounds very joyful and happy. It gives us the feeling of free and easy and light. It is kind of rhythmic. We feel so relaxed and also alleviate the pressure. <br \/>\n<br \/>\nIn the video, a number of Indian girls are dancing in a splendid castle. They just like celebrating something exhilaratingly. From time to time, a girl who looks mysterious and miserable is flowing a long towel in the mid air. She feels like crying. Later on, a boy has an accident. Somebody fights him violently. And what he does has let the girl down. The boy finds the girl and the girl forgives him at last. They get on with each other. They continue the celebration happily and dance romantically. Eventually, they live together happy ever after. <br \/>\n<br \/>\nIn our point of view, the mood is a little bit sad and the speed gradually turns down in the middle part. But chiefly the song is happy, and the people are having fun. They really enjoy the celebration. After appreciating this marvellous song, we are relaxed because that the song is funny. Furthermore, the cutting of the video is so hilarious. The rhythm of the song is brisk. The melody is quite good. <br \/>\n<br \/>\nOn the other hand, we think the video is too lyrical and does not match the song very well. Maybe the video should not be too sad and romantic. And it is a spare-no-expense action to have the gorgeous background. <br \/>\n<br \/>\nIn our opinion, it is better to use the American or British dancers and characters because the Indian dancers do not match the song. They are not active enough. It makes the song feel slower than it should be. <br \/>\n<br \/>\nAll in all, this song is quite good. They melody is not bad. We thoroughly recommend this song. Maybe you can give this song a try. We bet that you will have another special feeling.<br \/>\n<br \/>\nVocabulary: <br \/>\nThey use the simple vocabulary but it is very easy to read and understand<br \/>\nExample:<br \/>\n(The first paragraph)<br \/>\nThis song sounds very joyful and happy. It gives us the feeling of free and easy and light. It is kind of rhythmic. We feel so relaxed and also alleviate the pressure. <br \/>\n<br \/>\nGrammar: <br \/>\nUsed one tense \u2013 meaning is unclear and difficult to understand <br \/>\nExample:<br \/>\n1)On the other hand, we think the video is too lyrical and does not match the song very well. <br \/>\n<br \/>\n2)They continue the celebration happily and dance romantically. <br \/>\n<br \/>\nOverall: <br \/>\nCompleted the task \u2013 few mistakes and clear meaning <br \/>\nOverall comment: <br \/>\nTheir writing is verg good and ther use the simple word. However, it is ver easy to read but I think this wirting is too short , maybe they can writ looger.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"6197087","dateCreated":"1224146039","smartDate":"Oct 16, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"evachui","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/evachui","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6197087"},"dateDigested":1532127439,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"feedback :D","description":"Structure: <br \/>\nUsed 3 or more paragraphs, separated ideas clearly into different areas<br \/>\n<br \/>\nVocabulary: <br \/>\nUsed most linking words- a good variety of vocabulary and few mistakes <br \/>\nExample: good conjuctions and vocab, eg: reality<br \/>\n<br \/>\n<br \/>\nGrammar: <br \/>\nExample: really grat!!only one or rwo mistakes! <br \/>\n:)<br \/>\n<br \/>\nOverall: <br \/>\nOverall comment: you have given a really great expressions, and good linking, people understand what you want to express totally!! :D","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"6103415","dateCreated":"1223888199","smartDate":"Oct 13, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"chk_sharon","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/chk_sharon","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6103415"},"dateDigested":1532127439,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Feedback on Connie and Kelly - Romeo","description":"Structure: <br \/>\nUsed 3 or more paragraphs, separated ideas clearly into different areas <br \/>\nExample: <br \/>\nUsed 6 paragraphs, separated ideas into what's the story about, the mood of the video and what you feeling<br \/>\n<br \/>\nVocabulary: <br \/>\nUsed most linking words- a good variety of vocabulary and few mistakes <br \/>\nExample: <br \/>\nUsed 'furthermore', 'on the other hand', 'and', 'but'<br \/>\n<br \/>\nGrammar:  <br \/>\nUsed a variety of tenses to show change in meaning \u2013 few mistakes <br \/>\nExample: <br \/>\nUsed present tense and present continuous tense correctly<br \/>\n<br \/>\nOverall: <br \/>\nCompleted the task \u2013 few mistakes and clear meaning <br \/>\nOverall comment:<br \/>\nGood job<br \/>\nIdeas are separated clearly<br \/>\nUsed some difficult vocabullary without any grammatical mistakes","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}