{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"6235075","dateCreated":"1224252203","smartDate":"Oct 17, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"Antheapang","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Antheapang","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6235075"},"dateDigested":1532127412,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"feedback on the music review","description":"Structure:<br \/>\nUsed 3 or more paraghraphs. Seperate ideas clearly into different areas. Can show clearly what they wanna share.<br \/>\n<br \/>\nExamples:<br \/>\nThe first paragraph include a brief introduction of the music video. The second paragraph shows the summary, and the third paragraph shows their feeling and the reflection after watching the music video.<br \/>\n<br \/>\nVocabulary:<br \/>\nUsed quite a number of vocabularies. Can use more linking ords to improve. Not much mistakes.<br \/>\n<br \/>\nExamples:<br \/>\nLinking words: because, after that, although, sometimes.<br \/>\nVoucabularies: definitely, hilarious, inspiration, expectation, classical etc.<br \/>\n<br \/>\nGrammar:<br \/>\nUse a variety of tenses to show change of meaning, but there are some mistakes.<br \/>\n<br \/>\nExamples:<br \/>\n&quot;The video starts with a lonely and sad girl washing her hands and face in a very old and dirty toilet. After that she stepped out of the toilet and started singing peacefully.&quot;<br \/>\nIf they used &quot;washing&quot; at the first sentence,  they should also us epresent tense in the second sentence instead of past tense.<br \/>\n<br \/>\nOverall:<br \/>\nComplete the task with few mistakes and q clear meaning.<br \/>\n<br \/>\nOverall comment:<br \/>\nThe use of vocabulary is great. However they can improve in using more linking words, and the tenses as well. Try not to mix up the the using of past tense and present tense next. After all, this is a good music review, which can clearly show the main idea.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}