{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"6103869","dateCreated":"1223896686","smartDate":"Oct 13, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"kellykong0920","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/kellykong0920","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6103869"},"dateDigested":1532127535,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Feedback on Hilary and Christy - It's oh so quiet","description":"Structure: <br \/>\nUsed 3 or more paragraphs, separated ideas clearly into different areas <br \/>\nExample: <br \/>\nThe first two paragraphs tell what the video like and the storyline. The other paragraphs explain what the music like and their feelings.<br \/>\nVocabulary: <br \/>\nUsed most linking words- a good variety of vocabulary and few mistakes <br \/>\nExample: <br \/>\nThey use 'then', 'after that', 'also', 'but', 'therefore'.<br \/>\nGrammar: <br \/>\nThey use past tense to tell the story and present tense to explain what the music like and their feelings.<br \/>\nOverall: <br \/>\nCompleted the task \u2013 few mistakes and clear meaning <br \/>\nOverall comment: <br \/>\nWell language, maybe use more adjectives.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"6099485","dateCreated":"1223861192","smartDate":"Oct 12, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"athenasara","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/athenasara","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6099485"},"dateDigested":1532127535,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Feedback on Hilary & Christy","description":"Structure: <br \/>\nUsed 3 or more paragraphs, separated ideas clearly into different areas <br \/>\nExample: separated into 5 paragraphs, with contents of the MV and also their opinions.<br \/>\n<br \/>\n<br \/>\nVocabulary: <br \/>\nUsed simple vocabulary \u2013 use one or two linking words <br \/>\nExample: more difficult vocabularies should be used, in order to make the passage more concrete. Avoid using simple vocabularies such as, interesting and boring.<br \/>\n<br \/>\n<br \/>\nGrammar: <br \/>\nUsed a variety of tenses to show change in meaning \u2013 few mistakes <br \/>\nExample: Past tense for talking about the MV and present tense for your personal feeling.<br \/>\n<br \/>\nOverall: <br \/>\nCompleted the task \u2013 few mistakes and clear meaning <br \/>\nOverall comment: You can actually tell us more about the personal feeling instead of the content of the MV. Perhaps you can tell us whether you have gor some negative feeling towards the video. For example, chaotic or confused.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"6061783","dateCreated":"1223640885","smartDate":"Oct 10, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"Christina_sum_tse","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Christina_sum_tse","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6061783"},"dateDigested":1532127535,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Feedback on Hilary and Christy - It's oh so quiet","description":"Structure: <br \/>\nUsed 3 or more paragraphs, separated ideas clearly into different areas<br \/>\nExample: <br \/>\nThe first two paragraphs tells us what the music video is about. And the last three paragraphs just talks about Hilary and Christy's feeling. It separates these two ideas well.<br \/>\n<br \/>\nVocabulary: <br \/>\nUsed three to four vocabulary \u2013 use a few linking words but do not make any mistakes.<br \/>\nExample:<br \/>\nThen, After that, Also, Therefore<br \/>\n<br \/>\nGrammar:<br \/>\nUsed a variety of tenses to show change in meaning \u2013 few mistakes<br \/>\nExample:<br \/>\nHilary and Christy use past tense to tell us what the music video is about. Besides, they use present tense to tell their feeling.<br \/>\n<br \/>\nOverall: <br \/>\nCompleted the task \u2013 few mistakes and clear meaning <br \/>\nOverall comment:<br \/>\nWell organization shown in this eassy. <br \/>\nDo not make any mistakes!!!<br \/>\nWell done!<br \/>\nKeep it on!!!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}