{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"6409667","dateCreated":"1224868094","smartDate":"Oct 24, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"lorraine_0802","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/lorraine_0802","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6409667"},"dateDigested":1532127100,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"feedback on Gigi and Jenna -oh so quiet","description":"Structure:
\nUsed 3 or more paragraphs, separated ideas clearly into different areas
\nExample:
\nThe first paragraph is the introduction of the music. The second paragraph is about the story of the music video. The third paragraph is about their reflection of the whole music video.
\nVocabulary:
\nUsed most linking words- a good variety of vocabulary and few mistakes
\nExample:
\nlinking word: because, although
\nvocabulary: hilarious, terrific, unique
\nGrammar:
\nUsed a variety of tenses to show change in meaning \u2013 many mistakes
\nExample:
\nThe second paragraph should use past tense.
\nOverall:
\nCompleted the task \u2013 few mistakes and clear meaning
\nOverall comment:
\nA good music review with details.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"6253205","dateCreated":"1224304601","smartDate":"Oct 17, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"Antheapang","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Antheapang","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6253205"},"dateDigested":1532127101,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"feedback on Gigi and Jenna - oh so quiet","description":"Structure:
\nUsed 3 or more paraghraphs. Seperate ideas clearly into different areas. Can show clearly what they wanna share.
\n
\nExamples:
\nThe first paragraph include a brief introduction of the music video. The second paragraph shows the summary, and the third paragraph shows their feeling and the reflection after watching the music video.
\n
\nVocabulary:
\nUsed quite a number of vocabularies. Can use more linking ords to improve. Not much mistakes.
\n
\nExamples:
\nLinking words: because, after that, although, sometimes.
\nVoucabularies: definitely, hilarious, inspiration, expectation, classical etc.
\n
\nGrammar:
\nUse a variety of tenses to show change of meaning, but there are some mistakes.
\n
\nExamples:
\n"The video starts with a lonely and sad girl washing her hands and face in a very old and dirty toilet. After that she stepped out of the toilet and started singing peacefully."
\nIf they used "washing" at the first sentence, they should also use present tense in the second sentence instead of past tense.
\n
\nOverall:
\nComplete the task with few mistakes and clear meaning.
\n
\nOverall comment:
\nThe use of vocabulary is great. However they can improve in using more linking words, and the tenses as well. Try not to mix up the the using of past tense and present tense next. After all, this is a good music review, which can clearly show the main idea.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"6252815","dateCreated":"1224302126","smartDate":"Oct 17, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"MinervaBunny","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/MinervaBunny","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1224250706\/MinervaBunny-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6252815"},"dateDigested":1532127102,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"feedback on Gigi and Jenna - Oh so quiet","description":"Structure:
\nUsed 3 or more paraghraphs. Seperate ideas clearly into different areas. Can show clearly what they wanna share.
\n
\nExamples:
\nThe first paragraph include a brief introduction of the music video. The second paragraph shows the summary, and the third paragraph shows their feeling and the reflection after watching the music video.
\n
\nVocabulary:
\nUsed quite a number of vocabularies. Can use more linking ords to improve. Not much mistakes.
\n
\nExamples:
\nLinking words: because, after that, although, sometimes.
\nVoucabularies: definitely, hilarious, inspiration, expectation, classical etc.
\n
\nGrammar:
\nUse a variety of tenses to show change of meaning, but there are some mistakes.
\n
\nExamples:
\n"The video starts with a lonely and sad girl washing her hands and face in a very old and dirty toilet. After that she stepped out of the toilet and started singing peacefully."
\nIf they used "washing" at the first sentence, they should also us epresent tense in the second sentence instead of past tense.
\n
\nOverall:
\nComplete the task with few mistakes and q clear meaning.
\n
\nOverall comment:
\nThe use of vocabulary is great. However they can improve in using more linking words, and the tenses as well. Try not to mix up the the using of past tense and present tense next. After all, this is a good music review, which can clearly show the main idea.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"6253155","body":"wrong uploading:)
\n by anthea","dateCreated":"1224304339","smartDate":"Oct 17, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"MinervaBunny","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/MinervaBunny","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1224250706\/MinervaBunny-lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"6250289","dateCreated":"1224290702","smartDate":"Oct 17, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"hong0311","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/hong0311","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6250289"},"dateDigested":1532127102,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Feedbacks on Eva and Brian - The Chemical Brothers","description":"Structure:
\nUsed 3 or more paragraphs, separated ideas clearly into different areas
\nExample: Divide the main part into two paragraphs and a paragraph of summary
\n
\nVocabulary:
\nUsed one or two linking words \u2013 some different vocabulary but many mistakes
\nExample: At last, such as.
\n
\nGrammar:
\nUsed a variety of tenses to show change in meaning \u2013 few mistakes
\nExample: It had made us very difficult to watch.
\n
\nOverall:
\nDid not complete the task------not enough words
\nOverall comment: The structure are quite good but the vocabulary is not enough. You can put more vocabulary in the review in order to add more words. The grammar is good but a bit mistake is found. The most important thing is not enough words. You only got 121 words.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"6235741","dateCreated":"1224253533","smartDate":"Oct 17, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"Dorothylau","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Dorothylau","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1224253911\/Dorothylau-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6235741"},"dateDigested":1532127102,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Rachel Lee and Lorraine - Oh so Quiet","description":"After I read their review, I think their description of the story is good and in details, but I think they can focus in the music more.
\n
\nStructure:
\nUsed one or two paragraphs, separate some ideas into different areas
\nExample: 2 paragraphs
\n
\nVocabulary:
\nUsed most linking words- a good variety of vocabulary and few mistakes
\nExample: but, because, when, also, etc.
\n
\nGrammar:
\nUsed a variety of tenses to show change in meaning \u2013 few mistakes
\nExample: 'Some monkey'should be in plural form; 'the man think'should correct to 'the man thinks';also, 'he was'should use present tense.
\n
\nOverall:
\nCompleted the task \u2013 few mistakes and clear meaning
\nOverall comment:
\ntheir music review is good and attract be to listen to this music vedio.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"6235997","body":"After I read their review, I think their description of the story is good and in details, but I think they can focus in the music more.
\n
\nStructure:
\nUsed one or two paragraphs, separate some ideas into different areas
\nExample: 2 paragraphs
\n
\nVocabulary:
\nUsed most linking words- a good variety of vocabulary and few mistakes
\nExample: but, because, when, also, etc.
\n
\nGrammar:
\nUsed a variety of tenses to show change in meaning \u2013 few mistakes
\nExample: 'Some monkey'should be in plural form; 'the man think'should correct to 'the man thinks';also, 'he was'should use present tense.
\n
\nOverall:
\nCompleted the task \u2013 few mistakes and clear meaning
\nOverall comment:
\ntheir music review is good and attracts me to listen to this music vedio.","dateCreated":"1224254133","smartDate":"Oct 17, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"Dorothylau","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Dorothylau","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1224253911\/Dorothylau-lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"6234921","dateCreated":"1224251748","smartDate":"Oct 17, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"MinervaBunny","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/MinervaBunny","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1224250706\/MinervaBunny-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6234921"},"dateDigested":1532127103,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Feedbacks on Jasmine and Anthea - Da Funk","description":"Structure:
\nUsed 3 or more paragraphs, separated ideas clearly into different areas
\nExample:
\nDivide the summary into two parts and seperate the opinions into another pharagraph.
\n
\nVocabulary:
\nUsed one or two linking words \u2013 some different vocabulary.
\nExample:
\nThere are only one or two linking words in each pharagraph. -Use more vocabulary!
\n
\nGrammar:
\nUsed a variety of tenses to show change in meaning.
\nExample:
\nThere is only a few mistakes.
\n
\nOverall:
\nCompleted the task \u2013 few mistakes and clear meaning
\nOverall comment:
\nA well-written review. It has a brief introduction but many opinions. I also think that the melodies are not really beautiful and there aren\u2019t any lyrics. And I liked the idea of it shows the lonely feelings of the main character.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"6234491","dateCreated":"1224250845","smartDate":"Oct 17, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"s2007179","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/s2007179","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6234491"},"dateDigested":1532127103,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Feedbacks on Michael and Tom - Rabbit in the headlights","description":"Structure:
\nUsed two paragraphs, separate some ideas into different areas
\n
\nExample:
\nFirst paragraph is about the story, the second paragraph is about the opinion of the reviewer.
\n
\nVocabulary:
\nUsed most linking words- a good variety of vocabulary and few mistakes
\n
\nExample:
\nLinking words : Although, but, after, and...
\nVocab: tunnel, crushed, accidentally, amazing..
\n
\nGrammar:
\nUsed a variety of tenses to show change in meaning \u2013 few mistakes
\n
\nExample:
\nIn the music video, we can see a man walking in a tunnel. The man wore a big clothe.
\n
\nOverall:
\nCompleted the task \u2013 few mistakes and clear meaning
\n
\nOverall comment:
\nVery good","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"6127719","dateCreated":"1223971524","smartDate":"Oct 14, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"QCQC","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/QCQC","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6127719"},"dateDigested":1532127103,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Feedbacks on Shing and Jeffrey- Where\u2019s your head at ? ","description":"Structure
\nUsed 3 or more paragraphs, separated ideas clearly into different areas
\nExample: It was separated into 4 paragraphs, paragraphs 1-2 about the story of the video and paragraph 3 with their own opinions of the background music and the 4th paragraph with their questions about the music video.
\n
\nVocabulary:
\nUsed most linking words- a good variety of vocabulary and few mistakes
\nExample: meaningless , hit-and-miss affair,disgusting
\nlinking words: when,then...
\n
\nGrammar:
\nUsed a variety of tenses to show change in meaning \u2013 no mistakes Example: past tense talking about the story and their opinions
\n
\nOverall:
\nCompleted the task \u2013 few mistakes and clear meaning
\nOverall comment: I agree with it's opinion. Good organising, good views. You have did a good job!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"6106397","dateCreated":"1223907779","smartDate":"Oct 13, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"bmwong","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/bmwong","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6106397"},"dateDigested":1532127103,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Winson and Herman-Galvanise","description":"Structure:
\nUsed 3 or more paragraphs, separated ideas clearly into different areas
\nExample: 6 paragraphs
\n
\n
\nVocabulary:
\nUsed most linking words- a good variety of vocabulary and few mistakes
\nExample: correspondents, tiptoe
\n
\n
\nGrammar:
\nUsed a variety of tenses to show change in meaning \u2013 no mistakes
\n
\nOverall:
\nCompleted the task \u2013 few mistakes
\nOverall Comment:
\nClear meaning of the opinion, good organising of the whole review.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"6081121","dateCreated":"1223707454","smartDate":"Oct 10, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"rachel214","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/rachel214","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tonycreaney.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/6081121"},"dateDigested":1532127103,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Elizabeth and Natalie - oh so quiet---Feedback","description":"After I read the review of Elizabeth and Natalie,I think that they had described the story of the video and explained what they feel about the video.But their gramma seems to have some problem.Such as "she does gym in the street".It should be "she does gym on the street".Also,"the other people danced did gym very well."is also a bit strange.
\nBut overall they had did a good review.And they also try to recommend the music video to others.
\n
\n
\nStructure:
\nUsed one or two paragraphs, separate some ideas into different areas
\nExample:
\n2 paragraphs
\n
\nVocabulary:
\nUsed one or two linking words \u2013 some different vocabulary but many mistakes
\nExample:
\noverall,but
\n
\nGrammar:
\nUsed a variety of tenses to show change in meaning \u2013 many mistakes
\nExample:
\n"she does gym in the street".It should be "she does gym on the street".Also,"the other people danced did gym very well."is also a bit strange.
\n
\nOverall:
\nCompleted the task \u2013 few mistakes and clear meaning
\nOverall comment:
\nOverall they had did a good review.And they also try to recommend the music video to others.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}